just trying to make you smile
truly make happiness blooms
for reminding me how this is feels
when my smile is wide
here, I give you my sincere thanks
wish I make, that you feel the same way
and the end of this story, whatever it is
truly grateful I am, is what I want to tell you
Bandung
4th February 2007 - 02.28
I've decided the title for this post. A big thanks for Aldo, Bram, Devi, Credo, and Anna for the comments.
16 comments:
Untuk orangculun, gw pengen judulnya "If You Feel"
Gimana kalo judulnya "Bandung, 4 Desember"
Hehehe..
hm.. If Only ?
ah. never mind. I'm not really good at poetry anyway.
-> orangculun:
Sounds nice.
-> bram:
Haha.. it's a song title isn't it?? That would be plagiarism :P hehe..
-> devi:
It's good too. Thanks anyway Dev. I'm not really that good too :)
Ikutan ahh.. Sounds more like a "You Make Me Feel" poem for me :)
-> credo:
It sounds like another song title, (You Make Me Feel Like) A Natural Woman by Aretha Franklin isn't it?? :D But I like it anyway.
Ahahaha.. Yah, you're right on that. Mirip ya judulnya.
I just feel it's appropriate for the poem.
-> anna:
It's nice. Thanks anyway Na.
There's a typing mistake, but I can't find any grammatical error. Hehe.. :P
We are near to San Valentin Day :)
-> eowin:
I can't wait for tomorrow too :)
so the title goes to...
"it is you"..
hope u feel the same way too..
(gitu kan di??hehehe)
best line:
"truly grateful I am, is what I want to tell you"
dalam keadaan tertentu, kaya gitu susa.. grateful dengan truly di depannya...
hehe
-> wulan/ujay:
:) *blush*
-> ira:
Semoga bisa seperti itu Ra, setidaknya itu yang gue rasain sekarang.
Eh, I don't know.. Whether it's just me.. or the poem sounds more cheerful now with the title on it (and those line arranging, if I'm not mistaken).
It sounded somewhat gloomy before with the 'untitled' but now it's different. I think..
-> credo:
I don't write a gloomy poem here. So it's because of you then :p hehe..
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